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Words of Pain

You put me through all this torture
All this pain and all this misery
I wonít show my heartbroken tears
You can see that Iím hurt inside
You can see my wrist bleeding
I am dying inside because of you
I can only see red and black
The knife gleams with my blood
The rope gets tighter around my neck
I hate this but my heart says I must
A stake is piercing my heart
I try so hard to gain your love
All I get is a deadly answer
I am going insane because of you
Every time I hear your name
I lose control and I am broken
My sanity becomes lost
I am losing my mind
And I am at a loss of words
These words will always remain unsaid
This is Just an experiment I was trying out.... it turned out better than i thought... Tell me what you think and If you want, if yopu give me some random words, i could do a poem like this for you. (I am really bored so...) Just in case you are wondering what words I used to inspire this poem... they are: torture, pain, misery, tears, heartbroken, hurt, bleeding, dying, red, black, knife, rope, hate, heart, stake, love, deadly, insane, name, control, broken, lost, losing, loss, and unsaid. If you look close enough, you will realize that the words go in order..... Hope you like it!!
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bubblecheeks13 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2013
true true
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Cunt-dracula Featured By Owner Nov 1, 2010
***EMO ALERT!***
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ashwagalkaabi Featured By Owner Mar 16, 2010  Hobbyist Photographer
w0o00ow
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bacondog Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
cool, is it based on you or hypethetical?
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Jul 26, 2009
This was based on a time in my life.
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bacondog Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
oh, well I hope it got better, I love this peice by the way!
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Jul 28, 2009
It did. and thank you ^_^
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bacondog Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
ur welcome
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publicenemy009 Featured By Owner Jan 12, 2009
i like this alot. its a little dark but it gives it a more real feel to it

you should check out some of mine, if you have time, i would love to know what you think
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FireCatKirara Featured By Owner Nov 2, 2008
Wow. I like it ^^
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Nov 3, 2008
Thanks ^_^ I worked really hard on this one ^_^
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FireCatKirara Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008
I can tell ^^ I really like it. And btw, congrats to you & xXGothLovexX :D
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2008
Thanks ^_^ :hug:
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FireCatKirara Featured By Owner Nov 5, 2008
:hug: no prob ^^
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MasterOfPerfection Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2008
Cool :+fav:
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2008
thanks :D
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Dsupersaiya00 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2008
WOW! THIS IS REALLY GOOD!!
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Jan 7, 2008
Thank you very much :bow: it's based on a guy that really hurt me.
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Dsupersaiya00 Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2008
oh...i have put up some of my poems
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2008
cool! I'll check them out when I get some time
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Dsupersaiya00 Featured By Owner Jan 10, 2008
ok thanks
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liolta Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2007
Love your poetry its great! has something deep rooted about it. Cant quite place it but its brilliant! Totally ingenius :hug:
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2007
Thank you very much! :hug:
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liolta Featured By Owner Sep 9, 2007
Your welcome :D
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Anime-Angel-of-Gloom Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2007
Thats beautiful...
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2007
Thank you. I tried my best. It's about a boy I like but know I can never call my friend.
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Anime-Angel-of-Gloom Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2007
Youre welcome.

Aww how comes...
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Sep 5, 2007
he doesn't like the way I am.
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Anime-Angel-of-Gloom Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2007
Aww thats a shame i feel sorry for you *hugs*
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Sep 6, 2007
You shouldn't feel bad for me. It's life. :hug: thanks though. :hug:
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Anime-Angel-of-Gloom Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2007
I tend to feel bad for a lotta people, its just how i am.

Youre welcome ^^
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Sep 8, 2007
It's ok. ^_^ :hug:
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evilsmileyface666 Featured By Owner Aug 6, 2007
Wow, that was really good. You have a way with words, I must say. *hurries off to fav it*
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2007
Thank you very much. :bow: Also, Thanks for reading my stuff :)
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evilsmileyface666 Featured By Owner Aug 7, 2007
You're welcome. :heart:
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DaveyHavok1231 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2007   Digital Artist
very very good actually. i like this alot even considering the inspiration used.
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Jun 14, 2007
Thank you. The inspiration was well... yea. and btw... i :heart: your signature
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DaveyHavok1231 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2007   Digital Artist
your welcome! and thank you. :hug:
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Broken-Heart6 Featured By Owner Jun 15, 2007
:hug:
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